Wednesday 14 September 2016

Valley of Their Dreams

In the meeting of “Write Club" on September 10th 2016, the event coordinator Satpal Darynani discussed an interesting concept of micro fiction. It is also called hint fiction or flash fiction wherein a story is told in less number of words, meaning it is a short short story.
The idea makes sense given the reducing attention span of today's modern readers. Initially we were asked to write the story in 3 lines ( 25 words). Later we were asked to write the elaboration of the story in 200 words. I am giving below the 200-word version.

Vivek and Nisha were excited to go to the Kashmir valley for their honeymoon. Both of them held the valley as a heaven on earth. As the day of the wedding neared, Nisha was in a state of day dreaming and wild imagination, full of excitement and wonder. Oh the seven heavenly nights prior to the wedding! Nights engaged in dreaming with hardly any sleep! And the pictures in  the dreams were the same; fun and frolic with her beloved Vivek- throwing snow balls at each other, skating together, drinking warm ginger tea from the same glass.

Finally, the wedding ceremonies were over; the guests had left and it was just the two of them on the flight to the place of their dreams.The first three days were as heavenly and exactly as Nisha had imagined. Then it happened. While skating romantically on the icy region at around 6 PM in the evening; they had come in a group. Vivek, the coward, he disappeared….

Rest of their lives remained as cold and icy as the valley of their dreams.

10 comments:

  1. It's brilliant how you brought a twist in such a short story

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  2. Thank you so much Rakhi.So happy to receive your feedback!

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  3. True Mridula, Thank you for the response!

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  4. Thank you so much Amit! Happy you liked it.

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  5. Perfectly woven. Liked the twist in the end.

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  6. Almost a Chekhov there Rajeevji. Very nice.

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  7. Thank you so much Purba! Happy you liked it.

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  8. Thank you Anupam! So happy to receive such glowing feedback from you.

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